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"Words past your lips." by ~black-pen:iconblack-pen:



Now there's stillness in the eyes of the girl who you had to leave behind
With all her dreams that you dreamt along with her
She wants you to know that this won't ruin them
                                               (not entirely anways)
She ask you to not remember her, but not  to forget her entirely either

"We could of been something"
She screamed when they cut the line

"We could of been something" she still freins but, now only to herself just to make it through the nights
Replying it as a heavy chest falls deep like it does for one's true love
Finally falling asleep to her own voice; the lingering thought which won't subside when she awakens
She'll push out memories throughout the day awaiting until she can again seek the refuge of the night
" We could of been something "
  " We could have of . . . "
    " could of. "
©2006-2009 ~black-pen
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Author's Comments

I took the title "Words past your lips," from a line in Brand New's Play Crack the Sky.
I intend on re-titleing it but I can't think of anything else right now, but I promise I will.
Well with that being said, I'm not sure anyone will like this poem it's a bit jumbled I know. I think, to me, it has a over-all theme but I think it'd be hard for anyone else to follow. So, if you don't like this I won't mind I just need to throw something out there. Thanks if you take time to read this anyways!

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:iconxxbitterflyxx:
I love you. :XD: This piece is good! Like usual! :D
:iconneonrose:
fuck... i gotta go make a phone call to an ex girlfriend..... *tear*

good stuff
:iconblack-pen:
Oh thanks. It's not my best, but it was very heartfelt and so thank you for your time to read and comment on it [and the nice words helped too.]

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[There's Promise in a Pill]
:iconblack-pen:
Thank you. Hope that girlfriend call went well . . . :heart:

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[There's Promise in a Pill]
:iconxxbitterflyxx:
I believe this is one of your bests. :hug:
:iconblack-pen:
Oh wow, thanks.

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[There's Promise in a Pill]
:iconsleeplesscitizen:
Best of your works so far i think deffinite fav

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he who has hope has everything
:iconblack-pen:
Oh thank you so much. I'm not even sure I like it, but I'm glad you do.
:heart:'s x 1,000

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[There's Promise in a Pill]

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March 4, 2006
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